"They Say"
Exercise 1
a. Some people still believe that our groundwater is safe to drink. In fact, however our experiments suggest that there are dangerous levels of chemical X in the Ohio groundwater.
b. You would think that material forces such as, money, technology and engineering drive the future, but it is material forces that drive history.
c. A standard way of doing things is based on the common sense of people. In contrast, proponents of Freudian psychology question these standard notions of "rationality."
d. It is a common belief that women talk more than men, but it has been shown that male students often dominate class discussions.
e. Women seem to always believe that having a boyfriend solves everything, which isn't always true. This film is about the problems of romantic relationships.
f. It has become common today to use templates to make writing easier, but I am afraid that using templates like the ones in this book will stifle my creativity.
Exercise 2
If ever there was an idea custom-made for a Jay Leno monologue, this was it: straight people supporting gay marriages. Isn't that like vegetarians supporting people who eat meat? Whatever happen to making up your mind and choosing one side?
I happen to sympathize with these flip-flopping critics, though. Maybe that's because I am also one of them.
Hey Alexis. I really like your "they say" statements. The others I've read just added like 3 words to the beginning, but you made them interesting by adding usually a whole extra sentence, which got my attention and interested me in what was being said. However, I noticed little things like when you used "our experiments" in part A. you may have wanted to be more specific in stating "scientists experiments" because it sounds kind of wierd seeing as everyone didn't conduct experiments. Also, in part B. you might want to watch your tense changes (I always have trouble with this one too). I think it should be material forces that drove history, since history already happend.
ReplyDeleteYou did an excellent job at chapter one's part one exercise. I can tell you put a lot of effort into your work and added to the examples yet, you still followed the rules of the task. However, I think you will sound more intelligent and professional in your writings if you switch up your beginnings occationally. You used the "It is common" template twice and I feel from your extra sentences to the exercise you could of come up with a different template. I also repeated myself a lot a wish i would not have now that I look back on the assignment.
ReplyDeleteI like the way you added an extra sentence for introduction, but not sure if it was actually necessary for this exercise.
ReplyDeleteI liked your points a lot. You were very clear in getting your point out to the reader. However, I believe you gave some extra unnecessary sentences. A short perfect statement would have done the job.
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